tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667072811629542449.post1548663272345103374..comments2024-03-20T10:56:19.672-07:00Comments on Peter Writes: Maroon CityPeterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05783874123702072414noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667072811629542449.post-47495061862653801532011-09-07T00:21:51.303-07:002011-09-07T00:21:51.303-07:00Really interesting thought -- I've played with...Really interesting thought -- I've played with both since I read this, and I'm not sure which one I like better. I've stuck with "this" for now, because it implies the lack of ownership anyone will ever have over the land. "His" is too brash, too assumptive, and it'd work if this poem was from the man's POV, but man is just a bit actor here, a vehicle for the real fury. <br /><br />I've edited a ton of the poem, though. Shorter now, and more of the essence is here. Thanks for reading / being thought-provoking.Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05783874123702072414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667072811629542449.post-66490408260457387202011-09-05T09:23:16.199-07:002011-09-05T09:23:16.199-07:00i really enjoyed this, but on my second read, i re...i really enjoyed this, but on my second read, i realized i read my favorite line wrong..i read the first line of your second paragraph without the t in this.sshanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13354143163998247204noreply@blogger.com